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Men and women are capable of doing all jobs equally well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#men #women #jobs
It is said that, capability to do any
job
 well, were equal among men and women. Both does their
job
 based on their ability, strength and stamina, while they have equal rights their potential varies based on the natures gift to do any
job
 depend on their dexterity and adroitness.
However
, I deny the fact that all jobs can be done
well equally by
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equally well by
 both the genders. On the one hand, each and every individual is represented by
unique character
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a unique character
 and personality.
This
 brings us to the question that whether genders can be characterized by their traits. Yes, it is true that men prefer more engaging and physical activity based jobs than women.
For example
, when a flat tyre needs to be replaced in a car, men
does
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do
 the
job
 efficiently because of their physical nature of strength, even though women can do the same, the efficiency might vary.
Also it
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Also, it
 is commonly accepted that men were considered to be strong, supportive and aid in decision making.
On the other hand
, ability and
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of any
person determines which
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person to determine which
person determine which
job
 he or she can do well. Women are considered good at household chores
such
 as organization, taking care of children, cooking, gardening etc., while men cannot be expected to be the same in
this
 scenario. Even though, men can provide support and protection to the
family they
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family, they
 cannot stand par with
this
 when compared to their
counterpart
Suggestion
counterparts
. From
this
 it is clear that each gender has its own set of skills and abilities to do a
job
 well. With
this
 in mind, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that,
although
 both male and female can do both their jobs interchangeably, a
job
 can be well done only by a certain gender based on the character, personality, talent physical nature and emotional
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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