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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is true that some people complain that children should not be forced to learn a foreign language in school. The schooling s
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 teaching should be kept. On the one hand is commonly thought that schools give non-priority lessons which could be replaced by others, and language classes are one of these. Kids nowadays are not taught anymore everyday jobs
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 as cleaning or cooking, because there is no time to do
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 at school. Indeed, removing a foreign language from the timetable would leave space for other teachings.
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 does not imply not to teach languages at all, but just post-dating to their adulthood. On the other side kids are quick learner and learning to communicate is very important. As a matter of fact, before the 10 years children are very open minded and can memorize a lot more than an adult would. It
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 needs to be noticed that not everybody can afford to pay someone to teach their son after school, nor everybody would like to.
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, languages are not only important for cultural aspects, but
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 because they can allow to move around the world and start a better career. As an e
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would be impossible for an Italian to get a job in the United Kingdom without a good knowledge of English. In conclusion, people claim that the teaching of languages should not be compulsory in schools, but I believe
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 necessary.
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