Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.

The global phenomenon of
urbanization
has bought opportunity and prosperity, at the cost in the
quality
of
life
.
This
essay will discuss the various factors that
has led
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have led
to
reduction
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a reduction
in the
quality
of
life
of people and the possible solutions for the problem. The growth of industries and consequent
urbanization
has led not only to the development of job
opportunities but
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opportunities, but
also
replacement of man by technology. Most of the manual jobs are now done my machines.
For example
, the clay pottery
,
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,
carpet weaving that
were done
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was done
by workers by their hands as a part of their heritage are now done by machines.
This
led increased
production but
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production, but
at the same time loss in the employment of the workers. These people were forced to move from their villages to
hige
unusually great in size or amount or degree or especially extent or scope
huge
cities in search
for
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of
livelihood.
Also
, another reason behind unnecessary
urbanization
is the economic development. People in search of modern lifestyles migrate to cities
,
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,
not knowing the competition they have to face. Both these factors
leads
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lead
to overcrowding of cities, people living by the sides of the roads in
unhealthy environment
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an unhealthy environment
unhealthy environments
.
This
has resulted in
spread
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the spread
of deadly diseases.
In addition
,
crime rate
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the crime rate
has
also
increased.
Thus
, causing
decrease
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a decrease
in the
quality
of
life
.
However
, the
inpact
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impact
of
this
scenario can be reduced by
effort
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the effort
an effort
of the government in creating jobs for these people in their villages and
also
to create awareness.
For instance
,
government
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the government
can provide
initially
financial help for set up of small scale industries for villagers so that, they can
also
earn and run their household.
This
will decrease unemployment rates in villages and less people would migrate to cities.
Moreover
, awareness
,
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,
through visual or audio media should be created regarding the hazards of mass movement in
cities
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the cities
and
spread
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the spread
of diseases.
Thus
,
urbanization
although
has led to economic development throughout the
world bu
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world, but
t has
also
resulted in many problems that were previously
non existen
not having existence or being or actuality
nonexistent
t leading to
dreans
permitting little if any light to pass through because of denseness of matter
dense
e in
quality
of
life
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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