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Convience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Convience
Suggestion
Convenience
 foods are really common today. Many people like to consume it. We can find it everywhere and it really helps when we do not have time to cook it,
eventhough
Suggestion
even though
convinience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
food
 will never replace traditional
food
.
First
,
convinience foods' taste
Suggestion
the convenience foods' taste
convenience foods' taste
 will not be as delicious as the traditional
food
. Because of the traditional
food
 cooked from the natural spice that will give you different taste that you will never get from the
convience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
food
.
Second
, people still look for the traditional
food eventhough
Accept comma addition
food, even though
food even though
 they have eaten
convinience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
food
 much. It is caused of the unique shapes of the traditional
food
 or the specific way of how the seller
serve
Suggestion
serves
 the
food
ans
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 sometimes from the story behind the
food
.
Next
, traditional
food
 is healthier than
convinience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
food
.
Convience
Suggestion
Convenience
food
 will give big risk of diseases
such
 as
obsity
more than average fatness
obesity
, diabetes, etc. It is caused from the its cooking time
that is
shorther
primarily temporal sense; indicating or being or seeming to be limited in duration
shorter
 than traditional
food
.
Then
, the material itself, traditional
food
 is better than
convience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
food
.
Thus
, traditional
food
 will never be replaced by
convience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
food
. Because it has different characteristic and the uniqueness that you will never get from the
convinience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
food
.
Last
 traditional
food
woukd
past tense of "will"
would
 still be exist
eventhough
Suggestion
even though
 many recipes come out.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalent
  • traditional
  • convenience
  • replace
  • methods
  • food preparation
  • agree
  • disagree
  • opinion
  • ease
  • time-saving
  • benefits
  • cultural
  • historical
  • significance
  • concerns
  • health
  • environmental
  • impacts
  • increasingly
  • prevalent
  • eventually
  • popular
  • convenience foods
  • traditional foods
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