The charts illustrate four types of destination including part-time work, voluntary work, further study and unemployment that graduate and postgraduate students did after leaving the university in 2008.
The charts illustrate four types of destination
included
part-time Wrong verb form
including
work
, voluntary work
, further
study and unemployment that graduate
and postgraduate students
did
after leaving the university in 2008.
Unnecessary verb
apply
Overall
, most of the graduate
and postgraduate students
studied in higher education, whereas
the fewest of graduate
and postgraduate students
were
a volunteer.
In the first chart, most of the Change the verb form
was
graduate
students
studied in postgraduate programs, the amount of this
group was 29,665 students
. Both of
Change preposition
apply
a
part-time Correct article usage
apply
job
and unemployment had Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
a
little difference in the Correct article usage
apply
number
of students
in each group, there were 17,735 students
for a
part-time Correct article usage
apply
job
and 16,235 Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
students
for an
unemployment. The fewest Remove the article
apply
number
of graduate
students
was a volunteer (3,500 students
)
In the
Change preposition
The
second
chart, it had 2,725 postgraduate students
study
Wrong verb form
studying
in
doctoral degrees, the Change preposition
for
number
of this
student group more
than the Add a missing verb
is more
number
of postgraduate students
who did a
part-time Correct article usage
apply
work
not much (2,535 students
did a
part-time Correct article usage
apply
work
). The fewest postgraduate students
did voluntary work
(345 students
).Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
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