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Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food?

#people #food #care #costs #influences
Over time, there
are
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is
 plenty of economically foods have popular in
everywhere especially
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everywhere, especially
 local markets, because most of people nowadays do not consume a home prepared
food
.
As a result
, society is keen on
instant meal
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instant meals
an instant meal
 in daily life. A peak job time turns someone
to
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into
 an extremely instant lifestyle every day. Even though everyone knows some advantages of a healthy meal, but people prefer to choose fast
food
 which can buy from everywhere they go.
Also without
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Also, without
 worrying some effects which might happen from
meal
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the meal
a meal
, people think the lowest price is
also
 one of the interesting
part
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parts
 that should be
consider
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considered
for
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in
 choosing a meal. The other factor affecting choice is because of the price. In my area, a wide range of costly foods is rarely interesting people, so street vendors which sell the cheap meal grow everywhere day-by-day. Especially, students and workers, they seem thankful that stalls provide them with cheap and good looking packing meal. On one hand, people who have
concern
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concerns
of
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about
 the quality of
food
 believe that time and price are not an equal novelty value to compare with their health. They look after a whole family member with
homemade meal
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a homemade meal
homemade meals
 to bring to school and everywhere. They
also
 remark that “you are what you eat” is a right mindset to get their own relish for
future
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the future
. Concluding, I think people’s way of life of choosing
meal
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a meal
 depends on their money’s ability. Indeed, I believe some people out there prefer to eat
the healthier
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healthier
food
 than others whenever they have enough money to buy.
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