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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
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Environment
 improvement is one of the main important cases that matter both public and state organizers in the
last
 decades. So, to make our
environment
more better
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better
 than before we should cooperate together. In
this
 essay I will highlight the role of individuals beside the role of
government
 and big corporations to improve the
environment
.
First
 of all, every single person has the responsibility
to
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for
of
 the action that they are making
toward
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to
 their communities
thus
, positive
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 can improve them. According to many international
environment
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environmental
 organizations, they always ask people to reduce the usage of plastics, wisely use the electrical power in houses and recommend going to work by bicycle at least two days a week to reduce gas emission from their cars.
Also
, people can do more than
this
 to enhance their
environment
. So, governments cannot neglect their effective role to make a difference.
In addition
 to the public
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
,
government
 and big companies are making a positive change through
many ways
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the many ways
 in which individuals can be included.
Firstly
, state organizers and corporations' owners always encourage individuals to raise their awareness to protect
surroundings
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the surroundings
 by large advertisements and posters.
Secondly
, companies reduce the toxic
gases
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gas
 emissions from their factories.
Finally
,
government
 and companies as well as people can integrate together to improve their
environment
.
Lastly
, if
government
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the government
 and companies didn't involve individuals with them in habitat development, it would be a big mistake to
do
engage in
make
. The potential action of persons can make
huge difference
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a huge difference
 toward
environment
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the environment
.
However
, responsibilities of persons can be seen less important than of governments', they cannot replace their action toward
environment
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the environment
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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