The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.
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The graph gives information regarding people going to cinemas on different days in a European country in 2003, 2005 and 2007. For
year
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2003, the figure
color
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is blue,
2005
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in 2005
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for
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red, 2007
for
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green.
According to
the graph, people often went to cinemas mostly on
Friday
,
Saturday
and Sunday.
However
, among them,
Saturday
holds the trophy for having the most audiences
in
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each
year
, especially in 2005; making
around
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up around
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45% of
population
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.
On the other hand
, Monday is the lowest out of all, having merely around 8% in 2007. Interestingly, on
Friday
in each
year
, the figures are the same spot, which means that there is no difference
of
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the number on
Friday
. To specify, in 2003, the graph is
in
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the
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stable,
starts
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from 10% to 40%,
then
it goes down to 30% on Sunday. Kind of similar to the previous
year
, the growth is
also
stable.
However
, there is a quite big jump between Thursday and
Friday
. It increases from around 13% to 30%. At
last
, in 2007, the growth is quite massive each day, especially
on
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Wednesday to
Saturday
.
This
concludes that most people enjoy going to cinemas on
Saturday
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, friday, saturday with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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