Over the past fifty years, international sports events such as the Olympic Games and world cup competitions have played an increasingly important role in our society. However, many people think such events are an enormous waste of money, time and effort. Do you agree?

Some sports like Olympic Games and World Cup have played a
singnificant
important in effect or meaning
significant
role in our community over the past half century. But, some individuals consider these as
waste
Suggestion
a waste
of cash, time and hard work. In my opinion, I agree with
this
statement, because these resources can be used to provide better education and healthcare services. State's resources should be carefully distributed and used. Wasting these on sport,
instead
of providing quality education for its citizens, is not correct.
Firstly
, government should be open more school with better staff and equipment. In the addition, government should provide scholarships for higher teaching. It is learning and no games, which help the country
to grow
Suggestion
grow
.
For example
, all the schools in the Mumbai were closed down for
Asian Games
Suggestion
the Asian Games
in India, which affected the educational year of the students.
On the other hand
, effort and money should be invested in the
health
care set up. More hospital should be built with more qualifying doctors and staff. If
government
Suggestion
the government
do not take
Suggestion
does not take
care of the needs of its citizen, there is no point of spending on sport activities.
For example
, the budget for cricket is five times more than
health
in the Pakistan.
Therefore
,
health
should be the priority. In conclusion,
although
World Cup and Olympic Games have
essential role
Suggestion
an essential role
in our society over the past fifty years. In my opinion,
however
, more hard work, time and finances should be used to increase the quality of the education and the
health
care in the country.
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