Over the past fifty years, international sports events such as the Olympic Games and world cup competitions have played an increasingly important role in our society. However, many people think such events are an enormous waste of money, time and effort. Do you agree?

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Some sports like Olympic Games and World Cup have played a

singnificant

important in effect or meaning

significant

role in our community over the past half century. But, some individuals consider these as

waste

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a waste

of cash, time and hard work. In my opinion, I agree with

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statement, because these resources can be used to provide better education and healthcare services. State's resources should be carefully distributed and used. Wasting these on sport,

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of providing quality education for its citizens, is not correct.

Firstly

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, government should be open more school with better staff and equipment. In the addition, government should provide scholarships for higher teaching. It is learning and no games, which help the country

to grow

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grow

For example

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, all the schools in the Mumbai were closed down for

Asian Games

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the Asian Games

in India, which affected the educational year of the students.

On the other hand

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, effort and money should be invested in the

health

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care set up. More hospital should be built with more qualifying doctors and staff. If

government

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the government

do not take

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does not take

care of the needs of its citizen, there is no point of spending on sport activities.

For example

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, the budget for cricket is five times more than

health

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in the Pakistan.

Therefore

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health

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should be the priority. In conclusion,

although

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World Cup and Olympic Games have

essential role

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an essential role

in our society over the past fifty years. In my opinion,

however

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, more hard work, time and finances should be used to increase the quality of the education and the

health

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care in the country.

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