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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to bee shared freely. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

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A number of people are convinced that most information
are
Suggestion
is
 essential to be shared with each other in various fields.
For instance
: the academic field, scientific outcomes and business.
Otherwise
, other are concerned to keep them as limited as possible or to be paid based on their importance. The
first
 argument focuses to spread specific or general sources to get the required information, free for all.
Additionally
, it looks like a right for all searchers to enter any database to obtain them. In the scientific fields,
such
 as: medicine, pharmacy and chemistry, researchers show large efforts to search for
specific article
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specific articles
a specific article
, procedure or a chemical structure. So they have to look for free resources or subscribe websites, the university
ore
introduces an alternative
or
 institutions are following, to get their research targets.
On the other hand
, they will be owing to pay a lot of money for libraries to get a part of a thesis or to get an access into a scientific website. Not only scientists but
also
 students and businessmen need to have some data for their study and work.
In contrast
, other persons believe that the payment idea came from the crucial role of the data. Whether they were available to everyone, they will lose their value or they could be used in improper ways.
Accordingly
, they believe that they should make some restrictions
about
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on
 the data availability. In my opinion, I think that some legislation is a priority to keep it out of unsuitable usage. But other resources
such
 as academic books should be free to encourage students to be scientifically updated. In conclusion, people should be completely responsible to improve themselves
by
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with
 new knowledge and serious information by sharing them effectively, safely and in consideration to copyrights.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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