Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the recent

past we

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past, we

have seen an exponential growth in the technology that we utilize. The effect on an individual's social life due to these advancements is still debatable. Some believe technology

encourage

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encourages

people to be more sociable; while others disagree with

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particular view. In

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essay I will discuss both both aspects of the argument and state my opinion. Despite the developments,

face

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face

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communication

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has drastically reduced. It is evident,

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, smartphones have changed the

communication

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channels that we rely on.

As a result

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, we are vulnerable to many stimulants that can distract our attention.

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, people

have always rely

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have always relied

face

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face

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communication

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in day

today

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to day

life well

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life, well

before the introduction of these modern

techonology

the practical application of science to commerce or industry

technologies

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, the relationships that we truly value can be affected negatively and can make people within a small social group less sociable.

On the other hand

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internet

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the internet

and other mobile devices

have broaden

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have broadened

the channels which we can use to improve our

communication

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.I strongly believe that modern technologies have resulted in much better improved

communication

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. Social media applications

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as Facebook, twitter,

instagram

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and other platforms enable us to connect

from

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with

any part of the world.

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, in the recent past, tragic events that followed in the

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(Greek mythology) one of a nation of women warriors of Scythia (who burned off the right breast in order to use a bow and arrow more effectively)

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forest was not published in any of the traditional media networks.

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, Social media took the sole responsibility of bringing the deserving attention that it required. In

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a component that is added to something to improve it

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to the above, people can now develop new relationship with a click of button while enjoying the comfort of your own bedroom.

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this

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eliminates the stress and the social anxiety that one may go through when starting new

realtionships

a relation between people; ('relationship' is often used where 'relation' would serve, as in 'the relationship between inflation and unemployment', but the preferred usage of 'relationship' is for human relations or states of relatedness)

relationships

. Having looked at both sides,

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modern technological developments has compromised certain aspects of traditional

communication

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it has enabled us to communicate better and more efficiently. Personally, I stand in support of the argument

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make plain and comprehensible

explaining

that modern

techonolgies

the practical application of science to commerce or industry

technologies

make us much more closer and sociable.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

326 words

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Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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