Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the recent
past we
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past, we
have seen an exponential growth in the technology that we utilize. The effect on an individual's social life due to these advancements is still debatable. Some believe technology
encourage
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encourages
people to be more sociable; while others disagree with
this
particular view. In
this
essay I will discuss both both aspects of the argument and state my opinion. Despite the developments,
face
to
face
communication
has drastically reduced. It is evident,
For example
, smartphones have changed the
communication
channels that we rely on.
As a result
, we are vulnerable to many stimulants that can distract our attention.
In contrast
, people
have always rely
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have always relied
on
face
to
face
communication
in day
today
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to day
life well
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life, well
before the introduction of these modern
techonology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technologies
.
Therefore
, the relationships that we truly value can be affected negatively and can make people within a small social group less sociable.
On the other hand
,
internet
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the internet
and other mobile devices
have broaden
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have broadened
the channels which we can use to improve our
communication
.I strongly believe that modern technologies have resulted in much better improved
communication
. Social media applications
such
as Facebook, twitter,
instagram
and other platforms enable us to connect
from
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with
any part of the world.
For example
, in the recent past, tragic events that followed in the
amazon
(Greek mythology) one of a nation of women warriors of Scythia (who burned off the right breast in order to use a bow and arrow more effectively)
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forest was not published in any of the traditional media networks.
However
, Social media took the sole responsibility of bringing the deserving attention that it required. In
addtion
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
to the above, people can now develop new relationship with a click of button while enjoying the comfort of your own bedroom.
Also
,
this
eliminates the stress and the social anxiety that one may go through when starting new
realtionships
a relation between people; ('relationship' is often used where 'relation' would serve, as in 'the relationship between inflation and unemployment', but the preferred usage of 'relationship' is for human relations or states of relatedness)
relationships
. Having looked at both sides,
Although
modern technological developments has compromised certain aspects of traditional
communication
it has enabled us to communicate better and more efficiently. Personally, I stand in support of the argument
exaplaining
make plain and comprehensible
explaining
that modern
techonolgies
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technologies
make us much more closer and sociable.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online marketplaces
  • mobile payment options
  • personalized advertising
  • accessibility
  • compare prices
  • decision fatigue
  • impulse buying
  • financial imprudence
  • privacy and data security
  • transformed
  • streamlined
  • user-friendly
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