In many parts of the world today there is a profitable market for products which lighten or whiten people's skin. Outline the reasons for using such products and discuss what effect they have in terms of health and society. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Whitening creams have been in the beauty market for a long time and still has some d

rawbacks but

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drawbacks, but

with the right knowledge it can be more beneficial.

Skin

whitening products have helped many people

this

magnificent creation has accomplished l

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a lot

of people’s dreams of becoming whiter and looking better.

Moreover

, It has made some people to fit in with the society and even get more job offers. It has boomed the beauty industry.

Last

year, my friend used one of the

skin

whitening p

roduct

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products

to not just look f

air but

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fair, but

to hide a dark spot on his face(

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(

irth mark).So it does not only make you look fairer but

also

hide any dark spots which you wish not to be seen. Growing up as a child, I saw many advertisements about whitening creams and as usual there were famous celebrities in it. When we see the celebrities it suddenly clicks our mind thinking that they have been using those products to get that flourishing

skin

, so why not try it, maybe we could get a

skin

like them.

This

is the bait we all get trapped in and it can even cause major issues

such

as some people arguing that their product has not been working; not effective enough. Recently, my friend who loves makeup fell into the trap she did not care about how expensive the

skin

whitening cream was, but her favourite model was using it, without a hesitation she bought the product in no time thinking to look like her idol. Obviously, not everyone falls into the trap and people do research and look at reviews before buying any products no matter whichever famous icon is using it.

This

does not only save money but

also

your health as you would know what chemicals are added and if they are i

njuries

harmful to living things

injurious

to your health or not.

Fri Aug 30 2019

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