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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

#children #form #discipline
In todays life, children are becoming more
stubborn so
Accept comma addition
stubborn, so
,
Accept space
,
 to teach
them
of them or themselves
their
 parents need to take some action. I am 70 percent disagree with the statement that says
teachig
the profession of a teacher
teaching
 forcefully by
slaping
hit with something flat, like a paddle or the open hand
slapping
sleeping
sloping
 or scolding is the best way to teach discipline. Below is the explanation to support my words. To commence with, today's children are tomorrow's youth. It is
neccesary
absolutely essential
necessary
unnecessary
 that offsprings should know the basic
mannars
social deportment
manners
menus
,
Accept space
,
 but
its
it is
it's
 not advisable to teach that with
samking
the act of smoking tobacco or other substances
smoking
masking
 technique.
Smaking
Suggestion
Smoking
 has more disadvantages than advantages.
for
Suggestion
For
 an
istance
an occurrence of something
instance
 if
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 teach my brother
some thing
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
 like
cookingby
Suggestion
cooking by
smaking
the process of becoming softened and saturated as a consequence of being immersed in water (or other liquid)
soaking
smacking
 he might
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 his interest or he will not even attempt to do that aging in the
futur
the time yet to come
future
.
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