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Some countries nowadays, older peoplate not respected. Why is this so. What can be done to resolve this.

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In some nations today,
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he elderly are not given adequate
respect
 that they deserve.
This
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this
 and the possible i
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issues, disrespect
may cause in the society.
Respect
 is said to be at its low rate in the new generation today. People tend to disrespect the aged because of inadequate home training. Children who
lack
 proper home tutoring by their parents or caregivers are always on the brim of disobeying the elderly.
R
espect
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A respect
which is a virtue is instilled into individuals from childhood,
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nd when
this
 is not done properly or adequately,
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he reverse is always the case.
Lack
 of
respect
 could totally be dependent on busy parents,
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iscord among parents and
lack
 of parental g
uidiance.
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guidance
For example
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research carried out amongst Quebec students in 2006 to study the p
revalance
the quality of prevailing generally; being widespread
prevalence
of disobedience to authority and its possible causes,
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t was noted that 65% of children who are disrespectful or disobedient are from either broken homes or have busy parents. F
uthermore,
in addition
Furthermore
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his can result to some damage in the society. The new generation lacks the blessings and wisdom of the older citizens, because the elders are o
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in
the habit of blessing individuals who accord them maximum
respect
. From the biblical perspective,
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n Ephesians chapter s
ix verses
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six, verses
1and 2,
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e were mandated by God to honour our parents(
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(
epresentatives of the elderly),
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o that our days might be long.
Therefore
,
this
 could be the reason why longevity like in d
ays
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the days
of Abraham in the Bible has been deprived from the modern generation. In conclusion,
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he insufficient honour given to the elders can be caused by
lack
 of proper home training and
this
 will e
nventually
after an unspecified period of time or an especially long delay
eventually
lead to
lack
 of blessings and long life to individuals in the society.
However
,
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his can be alleviated only if c
aregivers
emulate methods of training the young f
rom
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for
ancient parents,
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s they instilled
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espect fully
in a respectful manner
respectfully
to their wards.
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