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In many countries, more money is spent on transport system in the cities. In contrast, very little is spent in rural areas. What are the effects of this and what can be done to solve this problem?

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Transportation system
Suggestion
The transportation system
 is varied among cities and rural areas in many countries. Some countries are focused
in
Suggestion
on
 providing the main cities only with efficient
transportation
 system.
This
 has a major impact on the level of the cities and countries. Providing main cities only by effective and variety of
transportation
 facilities will lead to major problems. One of them, most citizens will prefer to work in these cities. Having plenty of choices to go and come back of the work is an important factor person must look at.
furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
, Jobs opportunities in return will be affected. There will be more competition for jobs in the major cities while minor one will have
shortage
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shortages
a shortage
. That has many negative
impact
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impacts
. The number of population will
varied
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vary
significanly
in a statistically significant way
significantly
 between cities.
Accordingly
, will be
imbalance
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an imbalance
 with resources and facilities would be provided to citizens.
However
, many ways can limit
this
 problem.
Governements
Suggestion
Governments
Government
 must build appropriate
transportation
 facilities in rural areas as well. Having a clear strategy regarding needs and demands in each area will solve
this
 problem. In my opinion, major and minor cities must have a
variation
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variety
 of
transportation
 facilities. Each with what matches its needs.
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