IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree ?

#companies #sports #facilities #communities
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Local communities stand to benefit from sports and social facilities provided by the companies.
Such
Linking Words
 facilities improve engagement and improve the
company
Use synonyms
's image among the local population.
That is
Linking Words
 why I fully agree with
this
Linking Words
 notion. If companies invest in social facilities
such
Linking Words
 as community centres, it will encourage the community to engage more.
This
Linking Words
 will
also
Linking Words
 result in free advertisement for the
company
Use synonyms
 as well. When they create these facilities, they can
also
Linking Words
 put up their own advertising materials inside them. People using these facilities will
then
Linking Words
 be reached indirectly through these advertisements. Investing to create sports and social facilities will
also
Linking Words
 put the
company
Use synonyms
 in a positive light among the population. They will have a positive outlook of the
company
Use synonyms
 and the brand image of the
company
Use synonyms
 will
also
Linking Words
 increase. In the end, the above discussions aptly point out why companies should invest in their local communities. I believe the return companies stand to gain are far more than what they have to invest.
Submitted by thephpx on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: