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The table highlights data on the number of travellers using three major british airports between 1998 and 2003.

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The table illustrates data about the number of people travelling through the British airports,
Heathrow
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, Gatwick and Stansted, over a period of
six-years
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 between 1998 and 2003.
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, what stands out from the data is that the Gatwick
airport
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 and the Stansted showed only upward trends in
the
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passenger traffic,
whereas
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 the
Heathrow
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 saw both increasing and decreasing trends in the given period. Another interesting point is that the
Gatwik
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Gatwick
airport
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 served more
visitors
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 at the start and
at the
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end
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 of the period. Looking at the
detail
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, as regards
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the
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Heathrow
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airport
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, the number of
visitors
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 in 1998 was 27.2
million
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, and
then
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 the traffic increased gradually reaching 48.2
million
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 by the
end
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 of 2000, which is
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 in the year 2000 among all the airports mentioned.
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, over the next two years, the
airport
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 recorded a significant decline in
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visitors
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 reaching 33.2
million
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 in 2002.
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, it increased rapidly to reach 45.6
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at the
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end
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. If we look at
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Stansted
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airport
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 the trend was similar to
the
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Heathrow
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 until 2001
where
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 it was used by 47.3
million
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 people. At
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 point, despite having a growth of over 25
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 in the starting four years, it remained unchanged at 47.3
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 for two years till the
end
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.
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Gatwick
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airport
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 recorded 36.5
million
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 passengers in 1998 and attracted more
visitors
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 gradually till 2002, but
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 was followed by a rapid growth of passenger traffic in 2003 from 51.1
million
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 to 69.3
million
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 in one year.
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