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It is observed that in many countries, not enough students are choosing to study science subject. What are causes? And what will be effects on society?

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In recent times, there has been a reluctance in students choosing to study science courses.
This
 essay will look into the reason for
this
 development and
also
 discuss the effects that
this
 trend is having in the community. Perhaps, seen as the most important reason why students would opt for the sciences is the financial rewards that could be realised after studies.
for
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For
exaample most
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example, most
example most
 of the money spinning companies
such
 as Google, Facebook and Shell have their
foudation
the basis on which something is grounded
foundation
 built on knowledge gained from research works in the laboratories and these organisations in turn pay fantastic salaries to individuals who would utilise
knowledged
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
 gained from studying sciences to contribute to their competitive advantage.
Besides
, there is the prestige gained from studying courses
such
 as Medicine, Engineering and information technology. Studying these courses are seemed to be
rigorious
rigidly accurate; allowing no deviation from a standard
rigorous
 and are
therefore
 held in high
estem
the condition of being honored (esteemed or respected or well regarded)
esteem
 by the society most especially close
assciates
make a logical or causal connection
associates
associate
assets
 of the person.
For example
, In
Nigeria where
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Nigeria, where
 I come from, people would always want to talk
anbout about
(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
about
about about
 their achievement at public
fuctions
(mathematics) a mathematical relation such that each element of a given set (the domain of the function) is associated with an element of another set (the range of the function)
functions
 and a father is always proud and quick to say words like "I have two medical doctors and an engineer" as
this
 is a boost
on
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to
 his ego.
Finally
, people choose to study these courses so as to
live
go away from a place
leave
 their
foot print
a mark of a foot or shoe on a surface
footprint
 in the sand of time, because innovations are generally
atrributed
attribute or credit to
attributed
 to the sciences.
For instance
 great innovators like Albert
Einsten
physicist born in Germany who formulated the special theory of relativity and the general theory of relativity; Einstein also proposed that light consists of discrete quantized bundles of energy (later called photons) (1879-1955)
Einstein
 and Michael Faraday are
rememberd
recall knowledge from memory; have a recollection
remembered
 today because of works they
did
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 in
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
 laboratories that have made life better for future generations.
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Notwithstanding
, there are
severall
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
 ills associated with the increased penchant for science related courses.
Firstly
, it is obvious that the
entertaiment
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
 industry will be greatly affected because those
involed
connected by participation or association or use
involved
 in recreational
activites
any specific behavior
activities
activists
 are mostly
into
Suggestion
in
 the arts and
this
 could result to increased boredom and perhaps an escalation in the rate of depression.
In addition
, people who are naturally gifted in activities
such
 as
pubilc
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
 speaking, dancing, football and the likes may not be able to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their full potential as they are tempted to join the bandwagon. In summary, the rise in students choosing to study science related courses are due to several reasons as observed above,
however
 if
this
 trend is left unchecked, it could could
led
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lead
 to some untoward effects in our society.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Math)
  • Perception of difficulty
  • Early exposure
  • Engaging experiences
  • Career opportunities
  • Practical applications
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural norms
  • Critical fields
  • Innovation
  • Economic development
  • Global competitiveness
  • Public health
  • Environmental issues
  • Scientific progress
  • Educational standards
  • Biodiversity loss
  • Healthcare services
  • Medical research
  • Job prospects
  • Research and technology
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