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Some people believe that it is good idea to express that point of view and ideas through social media however others believe opposite do you agree or disagree

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a better thought
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The
society
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 opine that it is harmful to the
society
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.I agree with that given statement that social media has very beneficial for the
society
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. Reason for my inclinations are articulated below trailed ph
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At the outset, in today's hectic life people busy schedule matter social media had them
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, greeting Diwali through social media is one of the most popular medium.That st
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stands
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helpfully
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the social media side
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, there are some drawbacks of social media
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 and foremost is that some people of the
society
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 spread some rumours by posting ca
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caste, community
elated photo and accomplish their political agenda and
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 there are more and more conflict happen between the community.
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keeping
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these media can be
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the government
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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