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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts give information about the percentage of
tourists
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 from different places
such
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 us:
Asia
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,
USA
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the USA
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, Britain and
Europe
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 to Australia and German between 1960 and 2010.
Overall
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, from 1960 to 2010 there was a
decreased
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decrease
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 in Australian
visitors
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form
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from
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Europe
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,
USA
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the USA
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 and Britain
por
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for
 el contrario
visitors
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 from
Asia
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 had a significant increase. Germany for its part had a
gently
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gentle
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 decrease in
tourists
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 from
Europe
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 and USA
,
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 and a rise in
visitors
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 from
Asia
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 and
Europe
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. In 1960 more than 50% of the
tourists
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 in Australia were from
Europe
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 and in 2010 only 10% corresponds to people from
this
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 continent. The majority of
visitors
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 in Australia in 2010 were Asians reaching over 60% of the total of its
tourists
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. The majority of
tourists
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 in Germany in 1960 were from
Europe
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 (45%) and only 10% came from
Asia
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. By 2010 Europeans kept
its
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their
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 40% participation and
Asia
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 had
and
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an
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 increase from 10% to 25%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, asia, europe, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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