The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph represents how many men and
women
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completed their
university
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education between 1992 and 2007.
Overall
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,
women
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accounted for the majority of people who left
university
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with a
degree
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within
this
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period
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.
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, the rate of growth for the
number
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of female
university
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graduates
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outstripped that of male
university
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graduates
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. For
women
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, there was an upward trend regarding the
number
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of
university
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graduates
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. More specifically, from 1992 to 1994, an increasing
number
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of
women
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obtained a
university
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degree
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, from less than 100
thousand
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to approximately 103
thousand
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people, but the
period
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from 1994 to 1997 observed a slump to the mark of 100
thousand
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. Since 1997,
however
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, a rise in the
number
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of
women
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graduating from
university
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occurred, which resulted in
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50% increase to around 150
thousand
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graduates
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. As for the
number
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of male
university
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graduates
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, there was
also
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overall
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growth. Going into more detail, the first three years of the
overall
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period
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saw a slight bump in the
number
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of men completing a
university
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degree
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, from 70
thousand
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to 73
thousand
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, but
then
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the figures experienced a slight decrease until 1988
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when 70
thousand
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men obtained a
university
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degree
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. The
next
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three years saw erratic change around
mark
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of 71
thousand
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male
university
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graduates
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in the figures, yet, from 2001 onwards, the
number
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of male
university
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graduates
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rose consistently, ultimately reaching approximately 95
thousand
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people by the end of the
period
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, university, degree, period, number, graduates, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • general trend
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • dips
  • significant differences
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • data
  • period
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • cultural shifts
  • implications
  • workforce
  • economy
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