The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph represents how many men and
women
completed their university
education between 1992 and 2007.
Overall
, women
accounted for the majority of people who left university
with a degree
within this
period
. Moreover
, the rate of growth for the number
of female university
graduates
outstripped that of male university
graduates
.
For women
, there was an upward trend regarding the number
of university
graduates
. More specifically, from 1992 to 1994, an increasing number
of women
obtained a university
degree
, from less than 100 thousand
to approximately 103 thousand
people, but the period
from 1994 to 1997 observed a slump to the mark of 100 thousand
. Since 1997, however
, a rise in the number
of women
graduating from university
occurred, which resulted in an
50% increase to around 150 Change the article
a
thousand
graduates
.
As for the number
of male university
graduates
, there was also
overall
growth. Going into more detail, the first three years of the overall
period
saw a slight bump in the number
of men completing a university
degree
, from 70 thousand
to 73 thousand
, but then
the figures experienced a slight decrease until 1988,
when 70 Remove the comma
apply
thousand
men obtained a university
degree
. The next
three years saw erratic change around mark
of 71 Add an article
the mark
thousand
male university
graduates
in the figures, yet, from 2001 onwards, the number
of male university
graduates
rose consistently, ultimately reaching approximately 95 thousand
people by the end of the period
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