The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph represents how many men and
women
completed their
university
education between 1992 and 2007.
Overall
,
women
accounted for the majority of people who left
university
with a
degree
within
this
period
.
Moreover
, the rate of growth for the
number
of female
university
graduates
outstripped that of male
university
graduates
. For
women
, there was an upward trend regarding the
number
of
university
graduates
. More specifically, from 1992 to 1994, an increasing
number
of
women
obtained a
university
degree
, from less than 100
thousand
to approximately 103
thousand
people, but the
period
from 1994 to 1997 observed a slump to the mark of 100
thousand
. Since 1997,
however
, a rise in the
number
of
women
graduating from
university
occurred, which resulted in
an
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50% increase to around 150
thousand
graduates
. As for the
number
of male
university
graduates
, there was
also
overall
growth. Going into more detail, the first three years of the
overall
period
saw a slight bump in the
number
of men completing a
university
degree
, from 70
thousand
to 73
thousand
, but
then
the figures experienced a slight decrease until 1988
,
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when 70
thousand
men obtained a
university
degree
. The
next
three years saw erratic change around
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of 71
thousand
male
university
graduates
in the figures, yet, from 2001 onwards, the
number
of male
university
graduates
rose consistently, ultimately reaching approximately 95
thousand
people by the end of the
period
.
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  • general trend
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • dips
  • significant differences
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • data
  • period
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • cultural shifts
  • implications
  • workforce
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