The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high street shops. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the development of technology and infrastructure, people today can shop more easily than ever before with online shops.

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some people believe that those online shopping systems could end up with killing high

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shops in the future, I believe that shops on the

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will survive for three main reasons.

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, the price of goods in net shops is not as cost-effective as it looks like. In fact, the shipping fee is not included in the price most of the

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and the product can be more expensive than it showed on the screen at the end. Even though I concede that we have more choices what to buy, since the shops are usually international and have a wide range of selection, the

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the sender lives, the more expensive the shopping fee can be.

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, the products in high

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shops are more budget-friendly. Another concern of net shopping is

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some believe that shopping online is very useful, it is especially true for people who live in the countryside or rural areas, the

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they need to wait from making an order to receiving the good is not often considered.

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, in

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-sensitive cases,

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shops would get the buyer's vote.

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, when a family member falls ill, it would be a waste of

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to wait until the medicament comes from a sender of online shops.

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, my strongest argue is that better

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in shops. High

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shops usually have professional staff and customers can get appropriate advice from them that we rarely can gain from online shops. Since the

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is always a face-to-face basis, customers can enjoy better quality

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, refund or exchange

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can be done more easily by one of staff comparing to dealing with anonym sellers from online shops that ensure customers get what they need. In conclusion, not only do online shoppings take

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and can be costly, they

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offer worse

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than high

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shops.

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, I

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I acknowledge that online shopping is useful and offer more choice, I strongly disagree that they can end the high

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shops.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high street shops. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. Do advantage of this development outweigh this disadvantages.