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The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high street shops. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the development of technology and infrastructure, people today can shop more easily than ever before with online shops.
However
,
although
 some people believe that those online shopping systems could end up with killing high
street
 shops in the future, I believe that shops on the
street
 will survive for three main reasons.
Firstly
, the price of goods in net shops is not as cost-effective as it looks like. In fact, the shipping fee is not included in the price most of the
time
 and the product can be more expensive than it showed on the screen at the end. Even though I concede that we have more choices what to buy, since the shops are usually international and have a wide range of selection, the
further
 the sender lives, the more expensive the shopping fee can be.
Consequently
, the products in high
street
 shops are more budget-friendly. Another concern of net shopping is
time
.
Although
 some believe that shopping online is very useful, it is especially true for people who live in the countryside or rural areas, the
time
 they need to wait from making an order to receiving the good is not often considered.
Moreover
, in
time
-sensitive cases,
street
 shops would get the buyer's vote.
For example
, when a family member falls ill, it would be a waste of
time
 to wait until the medicament comes from a sender of online shops.
Finally
, my strongest argue is that better
service
 in shops. High
street
 shops usually have professional staff and customers can get appropriate advice from them that we rarely can gain from online shops. Since the
service
 is always a face-to-face basis, customers can enjoy better quality
service
.
Additionally
, refund or exchange
service
 can be done more easily by one of staff comparing to dealing with anonym sellers from online shops that ensure customers get what they need. In conclusion, not only do online shoppings take
time
 and can be costly, they
also
 offer worse
service
 than high
street
 shops.
Therefore
, I
although
 I acknowledge that online shopping is useful and offer more choice, I strongly disagree that they can end the high
street
 shops.
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