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Band 5.5

You have seen an advertisement for a community college that needs teachers for night classes. Write a letter to the community college.

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I am writing to City Evening College in reference to an advertisement I saw in The Vancouver Sun on May 14th for
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 teachers at your college. I am interested in teaching
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 and
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. I have seen that your guide for
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 term does not include these courses, but I understand there are now large numbers of
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-generation Koreans living in
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 part of the city who may be keen to learn more about their
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 and culture. I have a Bachelor of Science degree and a teaching diploma. I hold special qualifications in
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 teaching and
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. I was a science teacher in Korea
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 but moved to San Francisco in 2010. There, I taught
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 for Beginners and
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 at two community colleges. The
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 course assumed students had no prior knowledge of
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. It gave them simple everyday
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, as well as recognition of the alphabet. The
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 course focused on easy meal preparation and the art of pickling, or
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. In Vancouver, I could teach the same courses as previously, or we could devise new ones, depending on what the college considered its market to be. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Kim Stevenson

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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