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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating to the environment, population and education as well . What problems will your country face in the next 10 years? How can these problems be overcome

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To embark on, in the contemporary era
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nations around the globe will be facing problems related to education
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environment
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and population.
This
 essay will provide problems faced by our country in coming 10 years and solutions to overcome these issues. Primarily
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there will be different kinds of problems related to occupants,
edification
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Edification
 and habitat.With advent of technology
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online classes are becoming popular.
As a result
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direct communication with the tutors is decreasing
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Moreover
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children cannot concentrate completely because they will get attracted to the social networking websites like Facebook and Twitter.
Consequently
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it affects the academic results of
childern
a young person of either sex
children
.Due to increase in the number of cars and other vehicle's
pollution
 will rise.
Besides
this
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 because of
deforstation
the state of being clear of trees
deforestation
devastation
 different kinds of flora and fauna will extinct.So
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scientists will face complications in their research and people will suffer from a plethora of diseases
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The problems faced by over population are
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insufficent
of a quantity not able to fulfill a need or requirement
insufficient
 natural resources to provide adequate goods and services. What's more
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agricultural production will be poor to meet the requirements of the entire community.
However
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these problems can be solved by taking certain measures.
Firstly
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problems related to education can be resolved by reducing smart classes and encouraging students to study in schools and colleges.
Secondly
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problems owing to
pollution
 can be solved by encouraging people to use
pollution
 free cars and government should organize camps to plant
more number
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a number
number
 of trees.
Thirdly
, we can dwindle over population by promoting family planning.A good illustration of
this
 is, Iran introduced a national family planning programme in 1989
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then
, its fertility rate fell from 5.6 births per woman to 2.6 in a decade.
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Law enforcement agency
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should make awareness programs about
negative effects
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the negative effects
 of
high number
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the high number
 of
habitants
the type of environment in which an organism or group normally lives or occurs
habitats
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in the
next
 10 years, our country will face problems like, enormous diseases due to
pollution
 and extinction of plants and animals.Students cannot concentrate on studies and deficiency in natural resources and food production. These problems can be solved by educating citizens
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planting numerous trees and reducing smart classes in schools and universities.Promotion of
familly
a social unit living together
family
 planning and making people aware about
detrimental effects
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the detrimental effects
 of over people is the key solution to reduce the natives.
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