Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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For every human being entertainment is a part of their life. It relaxes the mind and the body. To keep everyone entertained, there are different groups of people who makes us feel better whenever we are depressed. In my opinion, I completely agree that these entertainers should be paid with a better price.

Moreover

, I believe that the research jobs in the field of medicine and space

also

should be paid with a decent amount.

Firstly

, in

this

modern epoch, the films are more advanced with the latest technologies which make the user to rate them with a splendid review. In order to remember the scenes in their mind, the filmmakers and producers enrich the system with the beautiful songs and the videos.

For example

, the film named 'The Bond 007' was worth to watch as the direction and the action scenes were directed with the risky shots.

As a result

, the wages should be more than anyone in the movie.

Secondly

, the dedication in the respective field of every entertainer should be considered, as they spend their days with hard work.

In addition

this

, they perform their act for their country and they want everyone in the world to remember them proudly with their performance.

For instance

, the sports person named 'Sachin Tendulkar' the famous cricketer who achieved a greater role in raising the play of cricket and the name of his country India.

This

results in

such

a way that the sportsmen like him should be considered more with the annual income. In conclusion, the entertainment varies in different methods in different countries and with the consideration of their individual hard work the wages should be paid

accordingly

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Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In a nutshell
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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

281 words

8.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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