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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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From my everyday experience and observation I can claim that discussion of an important
decision
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 with other people
bring
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brings
 many benefits. In the following paragraphs I will give my reasons to defend
this
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 statement.
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 of all, different people have different opinions. In order to make the right choice people should discuss every possible
decision
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 and its consequences. Making an important
decision
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 alone can bring many negative aspects.
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, a person can reveal his selfishness or impatience and the consequences of that
decision
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 can affect many people in the future. I think
that
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that's
 a good and wise
decision
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 can be born only in discussion because people can share their knowledge and experiences a look at the problem from different sides and aspects.
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 of all, I think that making
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decision
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a decision
decisions
 alone is unacceptable especially for a
company
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. Imagine that a chief makes the
decision
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 about increasing a production line without discussing it with his employees. In
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 case a part of
company
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's profit will be
spending
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spent
 on extended purchase of raw materials. So,
share holders
someone who holds shares of stock in a corporation
shareholders
 will be left without dividends.
This
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decision
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 may lead to getting rid of
company
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's shares and
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 of
this
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 declining the value of a
company
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 as a whole. To sum up, I think that a person should always consult his relatives or colleges when making an important
decision
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 to avoid possible mistakes.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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