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Introduce yourself and what you want to accomplish in your life?

#life
Hello, how are you all I'm fine hope so
your
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
 are too let me introduce
myself my
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myself, my
 name is
sheeraz
a range of mountains (usually with jagged peaks and irregular outline)
sierra
ahmed
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Ahmed
and
 I'm from Pakistan I've done my graduation from international university Islamabad in BBA
hons
a noisemaker (as at parties or games) that makes a loud noise when you blow through it
horns
hens
honours
 and my specialization in Marketing after my graduation recently
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 joined banking sector which is
also
 my dream to join.
Furthermore i
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Furthermore, I
Furthermore I
 started my career since 2018 to till as a customer service
officer i
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officer, I
officer I
 got
learned
Suggestion
to learn
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 from my job area... Right now I'm going to change myself towards more like getting
highest band
Suggestion
the highest band
 in
ielts
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 test so
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 can get
opportunity
Suggestion
the opportunity
an opportunity
 to visit different countries for
highr
advanced in complexity or elaboration
higher
her
 study. In
conclusion i
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conclusion, I
conclusion I
 just want to share my idea here so everyone
know
Suggestion
knows
 what exactly
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 want to accomplish in my life.

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Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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