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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#year #off #school #university
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In many countries, youngsters are often encouraged to take
an
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a
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 off, to work or travel across the world, before embarking on their formal
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 education.
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 recent trend,
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 known as “gap –
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”, has numerous merits and a few demerits, which will be discussed in
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 with, the biggest advantage of taking sabbatical to explore the world is that it gives them an opportunity to discover their
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 interest.
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 trips are not only fun
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 but
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 gives them a chance to socialise
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 engage in volunteering, and understand global issues and global culture
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 helps them to discover their real passion which is the foundation stone for a fulfilling
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.
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, data from Harvard
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, 2010, pointed out that
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the drop-out rate
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for
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 courses is around 10 percent less in those children who chose the course after taking a “gap
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” in comparison to those who headed straight to
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 after the high school.
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 to
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, working for a
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 before starting
university
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 reduces the financial burden of higher education to an extent. As the advanced studies are costly in most countries, working for a
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 helps them in saving money so they have to borrow less money and are under less financial debt, when they start higher studies.
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 to above viewpoints, the most significant disadvantage of
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 a break is that it can be a distraction from
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 studies. Some students find
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 breaks so relaxing and enjoyable that they decide to shun
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 studies permanently.
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 the incidences of
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 cases are few, the effects can be disastrous for their
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career
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.
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, a 2010 report from Florida
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 revealed that 1 in 100 students, who take “Gap-
year
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” never go
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to
 advanced studies and struggle throughout their life to make the ends meet because of being unskilled. To conclude, the break of a
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 taken before pursuing
university
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 studies helps students to discover their
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 interest and
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 allows them to consolidate financially.
However
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, for a minority of high school graduates it can lead to an end of an academic
career
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