Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measuresshouldbetakentoreducethesepressures?

Itiscommonlysaidthattoday’schildrenarepressurizedandarefacingharderandharderacademic, social and commercial challenges.
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intends to discuss the causes of these pressures and
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some remedial measures. I believe that
children
must be shielded from
such
mounting pressures. Today’s child is not competing with the child next door or even of one’s town or country. He is competing with the child of the global village. The big planet Earth of yesteryears is a small well- linked global village of today. Parents want their
children
to excel in every field. They send their
childrentothebestschoolswheretheschoolbagisoftenheavierthanthechildhimself
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children
.
Evenafter
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Even after
schoolhoursthereareprivatetuitions.Childrendon’thavetimetobloomandbringouttheirhidden talents. Socially
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the
children
of today are in a huge dilemma. They want to adopt the global culture,
whereas
their parents force them to confine themselves to the traditions.
This
sometimes makes them
rebelagainst
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rebel against
the
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rules laid by
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their elders
.
Then
,
theyalso
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they also
facepeerpressure
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face peer pressure
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good if
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theirpeersaregoodandbadif theirpeersarenotdisciplined.Thispeerpressurecoupled withtheconsumeristsocietyoftodaycanleadtoalotofstressandstrainonchildren.
Theyseethe
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They seethe
latestmodelsofcellphonesandotheritemswiththeirpeersandwanttobuythem.
Whentheyare
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When they are
unabletodoso,
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they get stressed
. The solutions are not simple.
Children
have to be handled with great care. Parents should have
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realistic expectations
from
theirchildren
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their children
.
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They should
haveapro-activeapproachandgive time to
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their children
.Thebiggestonusison
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the schools and
teachers.
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They should strive
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to bring out
the bestineverychildandcompetitionandco-operationshouldbothbetaughtsimultaneously.
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The aim
ofcompetitionshouldnotbetowinatallcost.Childrenhavetobetaughttowinwithmodestyand
losewithgrace
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lose with grace
. Tosummarise,thereisnodoubtthatthechildrenoftodayarefacingsomanypressures,
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but steps
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innocentchildhood.
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,
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these pressures will
stiflethephysicalandpsychologicalgrowthofchildren.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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