Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

It is commonly said that
today
’s children are pressurized and are facing harder and harder academic,
social
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Social
and commercial challenges.
This
essay intends to discuss the causes of these pressures and
suggest
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Suggest
some remedial measures. I believe that children must be shielded from
such
mounting
pressures
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Pressures
.
Today
’s
child
is not competing with the
child
next
door or even of one’s town or country. He is
competing
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Competing
with the
child
of the global village. The big planet Earth of yesteryears is a small well-
linked
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Linked
global village of
today
. Parents want their children to excel in every field. They send
their
objective case of they
them
children
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Children
to the best schools where the school bag is often heavier than the
child
himself. Even after
school
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School
hours there are private tuitions. Children don’t have time to bloom and bring out their hidden
talents
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Talents
. Socially
also
the children of
today
are in a huge dilemma. They want to adopt the global culture,
whereas
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Whereas
their parents force them to confine themselves to the traditions.
This
sometimes makes
them
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They
Them
rebel against the rules laid by their elders.
Then
, they
also
face peer pressure, which can be
good
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Good
if their peers are good and bad if their peers are not disciplined.
This
peer pressure coupled
with
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With
the consumerist society of
today
can lead to a lot of stress and strain on children. They see the
latest
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Latest
models of cell phones and other items with their peers and want to buy them. When they are
unable
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Unable
to do so, they get stressed. The solutions are not simple. Children have to be handled with great care. Parents should have
realistic
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Realistic
expectations from their children. They should have a pro-active approach and give time to
their
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Their
children. The biggest onus is on the schools and teachers. They should strive to bring out the
best
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Best
in every
child
and competition and co-operation should both be taught simultaneously. The aim
of
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Of
competition should not be to win at all cost. Children have to be taught to win with modesty and
lose
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Lose
with grace. To summarise, there is no doubt that the children of
today
are facing so many pressures, but steps
should
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Should
be taken on a war footing to protect their innocent childhood.
Otherwise
, these pressures will
stifle
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Stifle
the physical and psychological growth of children.
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