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*QUESTION* There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. *Do the advantages* of having a small family rather than a large family *outweighs* *the disadvantages ?*

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The population of the world is rising and
its
it is
it's
 a
concern specially
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concern, especially
concern especially
for
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in
 cities where
population density
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the population density
 is very high.
Now a days
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Nowadays
, most people choose to have
small family
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small families
a small family
. But is it really a good idea?
This
 essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family. There are two main advantages of having a small family.
Firstly
, since in a small family, number of members are less it is easy to manage.
For instance
, having a single child both parents can switch duties in order to take care of the kids.
Secondly
, the cost of maintaining a small family is less.
For example
, the expenses of kids in school's are very high in cities.
Thus
, a small family is easily
managable
capable of being managed or controlled
manageable
 and budget friendly.
However
, there are certain disadvantages of
nuclear family
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the nuclear family
nuclear families
. The primary disadvantage of not having
large family
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a large family
large families
 is that the kids behaviour and social skills are not developed due to less people to interact with at home. A recent scientific study shows that juveniles in nuclear family are more introverts than in joint family.
Thus
 a nuclear family will have
impact
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an impact
 on
childs
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child's
childish
 nature. To
summerize
give a summary (of)
summarize
summarise
, there are both advantages and disadvantages of having a small family.
However
, in my
opnion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
 the pros of having a nuclear family
outweighs
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outweigh
 the cons.

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