Some people believe that what children watch in television influence on children's behaviour. Others say that amount of time on television influence their behaviour. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Today we live in technological
era there
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era, there
are
plethora
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a plethora
of technological gadgets have been made for
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
. In
this
essay some people opine that,
children
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child
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
depends on how kind of programs and
show
on
television
and other people opine that there are several
effect
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effects
on
children
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children's
child
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
though
show
long time
television
programes
a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished
programs
programmes
. I will give my opinion in
conclusion
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the conclusion
Children mind
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The child's mind
Child's mind
A child's mind
is very sensitive and
imigination
the formation of a mental image of something that is not perceived as real and is not present to the senses
imagination
so they can easily
capture visulization
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capture, visualize
capture visualize
capture visualization
capture visualizing
things which they want to see in the
television
parents are busy to cope with
demands
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the demands
of the fast paced life and they have no time for their children
then
their children
show
many hazardous
program
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programs
on
television
. It is
effect
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effected
on their
behaviour
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behaviour, for
for example
. In Sony channel telecast
khatro
a specific piece of work required to be done as a duty or for a specific fee
chore
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khiladi
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Khiladi
program and many children
show

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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