Some people say that youngster should take part time job while study in university. Do you agree or disagree.

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In the contemporary era

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education

play

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plays

an important role in our life because

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education is

third eye

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the third eye

of human beings

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Some people think that adults should take

part

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a part time job

time

job

rather than

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study

in university

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I will completely disagree with

this

statement. Some opponents

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undoubted say that children should take

part

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a part time job

time

job

with the continue

study

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studying

because of that they can learn about the

money

management skill with the

continue

occurring without interruption; chiefly restricted to what recurs regularly or frequently in a prolonged and closely spaced series

continual

study

and

also

they are

helped

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helping

parents in their financial status.

however

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However

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children should focus only on academic

study

because, children continue thinking about the earning

money

how

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How

to earn more

money

as a result

, children become

money

minded.

Moreover

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adults can not

concentration

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concentrate

on their

study

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study, therefore,

therefore

,they take

part

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a part time job

time

job

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Definitely

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they can distract on their

study

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Furthermore

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they do work and

study

at a place

then

they can feel stress or burden regarding the studying because

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they do not make proper concentration about the

study

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mostly

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Mostly

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the chances of adults fail in their

study

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In conclusion,

although

, children should take

part

time

job

experience yet academic

study

is most impact for

better future

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a better future

. In my point of view

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adults should focus only on

study

because

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they can get more achievement in a life.

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Some people say that youngster should take part time job while study in university. Do you agree or disagree.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

Many work people today work at home rather than in an office. Are there more advantages to working remotely than disadvantages?

Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter suggest a suitable date and time for the party recommend a venue propose the food and entertainment options that should be available.

Rich countries often give financial aid to poor countries, but it does not solve poverty, so rich countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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