Some people say that youngster should take part time job while study in university. Do you agree or disagree.

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education

play

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plays

an important role in our life because

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education is

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third eye

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the third eye

of human beings

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Some people think that adults should take

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part

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a part time job

time

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job

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rather than

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study

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in university

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I will completely disagree with

this

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statement. Some opponents

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undoubted say that children should take

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part

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a part time job

time

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job

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with the continue

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study

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studying

because of that they can learn about the

money

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management skill with the

continue

occurring without interruption; chiefly restricted to what recurs regularly or frequently in a prolonged and closely spaced series

continual

study

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and

also

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they are

helped

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helping

parents in their financial status.

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however

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However

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children should focus only on academic

study

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because, children continue thinking about the earning

money

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how

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How

to earn more

money

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, children become

money

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minded.

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adults can not

concentration

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concentrate

on their

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study

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study, therefore,

therefore

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,they take

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part

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a part time job

time

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job

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they can distract on their

study

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they do work and

study

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at a place

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they can feel stress or burden regarding the studying because

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they do not make proper concentration about the

study

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mostly

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Mostly

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the chances of adults fail in their

study

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In conclusion,

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, children should take

part

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time

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job

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experience yet academic

study

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is most impact for

better future

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a better future

. In my point of view

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adults should focus only on

study

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because

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they can get more achievement in a life.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
32
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

205 words

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Some people say that youngster should take part time job while study in university. Do you agree or disagree.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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