Some people say that youngster should take part time job while study in university. Do you agree or disagree.

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In the contemporary era

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education

play

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plays

an important role in our life because

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education is

third eye

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the third eye

of human beings

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Some people think that adults should take

part

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a part time job

time

job

rather than

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study

in university

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I will completely disagree with

this

statement. Some opponents

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undoubted say that children should take

part

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a part time job

time

job

with the continue

study

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studying

because of that they can learn about the

money

management skill with the

continue

occurring without interruption; chiefly restricted to what recurs regularly or frequently in a prolonged and closely spaced series

continual

study

and

also

they are

helped

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helping

parents in their financial status.

however

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However

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children should focus only on academic

study

because, children continue thinking about the earning

money

how

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How

to earn more

money

as a result

, children become

money

minded.

Moreover

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adults can not

concentration

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concentrate

on their

study

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study, therefore,

therefore

,they take

part

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a part time job

time

job

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Definitely

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they can distract on their

study

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Furthermore

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they do work and

study

at a place

then

they can feel stress or burden regarding the studying because

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they do not make proper concentration about the

study

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mostly

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Mostly

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the chances of adults fail in their

study

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In conclusion,

although

, children should take

part

time

job

experience yet academic

study

is most impact for

better future

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a better future

. In my point of view

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adults should focus only on

study

because

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they can get more achievement in a life.

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Some people say that youngster should take part time job while study in university. Do you agree or disagree.

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