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Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some are of the opinion that the Government should supportive of artists and others think that rendering significant help to them is a not necessary in every sense of it. In my opinion, I think artists should be given maximum reference when it comes to aiding their course. On one hand, being supportive of artists has a good effect on the image of a
country
 as their work promotes the culture and
relevance
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the relevance
 of a Government
to
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in
 the entire world.
For example
, their paintings, sculptures, modellings and art works tend to attract foreigners to their
country
,
thus
 increasing the influx of tourists, thereby, causing the GDP to rise significantly.
On the other hand
, there are a lot of pressing matters that a Nation is expected to give priority rather than giving assistance to
artist
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artists
the artist
 and I totally agree with
this
 point. Some of these include: education, health and the power sector to mention a few.
Majority
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The majority
 of the citizens in a
country
 basically need good health care facilities, quality education and stable power supply to enjoy the basic amenities that a
country
 is expected to provide to her citizens. Prioritizing support for artist seems to be a complete loss of focus for an underdeveloped Government who engages in that. In conclusion, though some think that supporting artists is not a waste of money, others are of the opinion that diverting
such
 funds to improve other sectors of the government is more important and I strongly agree with
this
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote
  • culture
  • creativity
  • economic growth
  • tourism
  • social development
  • personal development
  • merit
  • financial support
  • balanced
  • transparent
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