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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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Many people believe that increasing the gasoline rates would be the best possible mean to reduce the traffic issues and growing pollution.
Although
 a rise in petroleum cost may have some impact on traffic and pollution problems, it is definitely not the best option because it would result in inflation in the country. So I have to completely disagree with
this
. The better way to solve these problems would be to improve public transport and increase taxation on private cars.
To begin
 with, raising the fuel prices would lead to a significant inflation in the country. Clearly, a rise in the cost of fuel would lead to a higher expenditure on the transports of goods, which would see people buying the daily household items like grocery and vegetables at a much higher rates.
Similarly
, it would affect the energy production expenditure from fossil fuels, resulting in expensive electricity being provided to the industry, which would in turn
also
 rise the production cost,
further
 contributing to a price hike. I,
therefore
, believe that increasing petrol prices would not be a wise idea to mitigate traffic and pollution concerns. The best way to meet these issues would be to introduce taxation on private cars' travelling and parking, and
also
 improve the public transport.
In other words
, if a better alternatives to car travelling could be made available to the public in terms of cheap, safe, comfortable and convenient buses, trams and trains, and
also
 by increasing the routes to carry maximum passengers from all parts of the city, people would love to shift from private cars to these facilities.
Moreover
,
further
 taxation on private car utility as well as an increase in parking fee would
also
 discourage people to use personal vehicles. All these steps would help solve the environmental and transport issues of a country. To conclude, I firmly believe that increasing fuel rates is not the solution of transportation and emission challenges, rather legislation to increase taxes on the use of personal vehicle and availability of better alternatives would help controlling these issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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