Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

In today’s world due to the advancement of technology new inventions are coming into existence. It is true that ‘Necessity is a mother of invention’.
Internet
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The internet
is just like a wonder box, which contains every type of information.
Besides it
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Besides, it
has
also
proved as a very important tool to connect people with one another. In today’s modernized
era nobody
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era, nobody
has sufficient time to write letters to their loved ones.
Moreover it
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Moreover, it
also
takes longer to send or receive any information. But the Internet is the easiest way to send messages to our loved ones. Communication can be either in the form of e-mail or through text messages sent via internet to mobile phones. We can send and receive messages straight way. In other
hand today’s
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hand, today’s
young generation
mostly prefers
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will mostly prefer
to do chatting through the Internet. During
such
chatting we can write messages and get replies straight away.
Moreover voice
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Moreover, voice
chatting is going to be
very popular day
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a very popular day
-by-day. As it is a reality the advantages and disadvantages resemble two sides of one coin, which usually runs parallel. So like other
things internet
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things, internet
also
have some downsides, like causing people health
problems
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problems, for
for example
, poor
eye-sight
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
, back ache or migraines. Today’s teenagers usually prefer to spend their time on the internet rather than to participating in other physical activities, which causing them to have a weaker physical health. To conclude, I would like to say that the Internet is one of the most modernized and most successful tools, not only for communication, even to get
most relevant
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more relevant
information regarding every field in a very short period of time.
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