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Education is not luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

#education #luxury #right #wealth
Education is one of the essentials in life. Providing citizens with good education must be a priority as it has a great impact not only on the individual but
also
 the
community
. The presence of private schools and universities should stay optional for whom can offer the fees. Education is the
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 to have a civilized
community
. When the government ensures providing the citizens with good quality of knowledge in schools and universities, it will be reflected in the
community
. Keeping in mind education includes not only math and learning how to write. A good example if you give an appropriate information in
this
 field, you will have a healthy
community
. That's why high-quality education is very important.
However
, wealthy people may aim to go to private schools which can provide them with additional subjects they wish for
such
 as music or teaching
second
 language.
In addition
, the easy-access to their houses and the small number of students in school are exceptional features in private schools.
This
 is a good advantage for rich people, but poor people cannot afford the fees. In conclusion, Education is one of the most important and essential elements that everyone must have to ensure in result well-polished communities. In my opinion availability of free access to schools must be ensured for all citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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