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Cricket has become more popular than the national sports in the sub-continental countries. What do you think are the reasons behind this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Cricket
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 is an English sport, it is the national
game
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 of England and Wales. The popularity of
cricket
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game
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 increasing in the sub-continental nation
such
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 as India, Shri-Lanka, Pakistan, Bangladesh and so on. I opine that the primary reasons for
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its
 widespread are the good
performance
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 of the
team
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 and the financial attractiveness of
this
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 sport. It is comparatively attractive than a country's own national
game
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.
To begin
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 with, the popularity of
this
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 sport in
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 country because of their
team
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performance
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.
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The majority
 of the nation who played
cricket
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, won the ICC world cup at least one time
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except Afghanistan). So that person of that country shows more interest in
this
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game
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 rather than the national
game
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.
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, in India,
cricket
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 becomes more eminent as their
team
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performance
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 is outstanding but India's national
game
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 is hockey. Another reason of popularity of
cricket
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 is a financial attraction as cricketer
get
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gets
 more monetary benefits, they acquire the opportunity to work in the advertisement because of their name and fame in
cricket
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,
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, Indian former cricketer Sachin Tendulkar hosted an advertisement
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by
 Apollo Tyres.
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, more investors associated with the
cricket
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 by investing the money
instead
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 of the national
game
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 and
this
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 way they promote their product and
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cricket
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 association get some monetary help.
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, medial
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 becomes a dominant reason as they bring
cricket
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in
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into
 limelight as a wider range of coverage. In conclusion, in my opinion,
cricket
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 has become more popular for their
team
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performance
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 and financially beneficial to their
team
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members but
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members, but
 we can not neglect our national
game
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 it is
also
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 important as
cricket
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Iconic matches
  • International tournaments
  • Media coverage
  • Sponsorship
  • Broadcasting deals
  • Household names
  • Role models
  • Infrastructure
  • Grassroots programs
  • Cricket academies
  • Cultural fabric
  • Shared national experience
  • Financial incentives
  • Career prospects
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