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Government should spend more money on railway rather than road. To what extent do you agree?

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Mobility is a major characteristic of living things,
therefore
 necessitating an easy, convenient and safe means. Reason for the
moot
Suggestion
math
moat
 on if
government
 should invest more money into railway than
road
 as a means of transportation, of which I am fully in support of. Payment for
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 services generates revenue for maintenance and sustenance.
For instance
, in
Ukraine where
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Ukraine, where
 the
government
 instituted more funds into the subway system, the citizen pays for riding the train and
thus
, generates more money for maintenance thereby making the means readily available all year round. The safety of its citizen is the responsibility of any
government and
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government, and
this
 is very important when considering a means of transportation.
For example
, the New York Journal published in September 2018 recorded more than 80 percent accident on
road
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the road
roads
 and less than 3% occurred on
train
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a train
the train
trains
. The comfortability that comes with railway when travelling long distance cannot be neglected because it provides a bed to sleep and a convenience to ease oneself justifying why the
government
 should spend more money on
railway
Suggestion
railways
. The
road
 along two big cities in Nigeria is being repaired for the fourth time in 10years due to excessive number of cars plying the
road
 with no income generation for maintenance, despite the fact that movement by car is not quite safe and uncomfortable mostly with long distance. Conclusively, I agree that the
government
 should invest in a means that would increase the Gross National Development, ensure the safety of its citizen, as well as provide comfort.
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