Some people argue that technological inventions such as mobile phones making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is

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undoubatable

too obvious to be doubted

indubitable

fact that scientific devices

has completely changed

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have completely changed

the human's life in many ways. It is believed by some people that these inventions

has

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have

negative impact on society as they become less friendly and less sociable.

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agree with

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statement. To start with, there are numerous reasons people become less sociable.

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, people get addicted towards these applications as they do not want to move out during their leisure time because mobile phone make their life easier. To exemplify, these sites provide information about the things happening around the world.

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, they do

not prefer to talk

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prefer to not talk

with their neighbours in their free times.

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, youngsters spend their much time on mobile phones

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and

they don not spend time with their family members. So because of

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it would

also

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distract them from their study and they want to live alone.

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result they

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result, they

are suffering from many diseases

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as depression, tension. On the opposing side, there is no doubt mobile phones have negative

impact but

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impact, but

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also connect

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also connects

has also connected

people with any corner of the world but

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believe that over indulgence is not good.

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people make

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people, make

new friends

online but

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online, but

it is

it's

less face to face

intreactions

a mutual or reciprocal action; interacting

interactions

interaction

instruction

. To conclude, it is true that mobile phone are

good source

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a good source

knowledge but

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knowledge, but

it would make people selfish and less sociable.

Thu Sep 05 2019

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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226 words

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Some people argue that technological inventions such as mobile phones making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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Some people dislike changes in their society and in their own lives, and want things to stay the same. Why do some people want things to stay the same? Why should change be regarded as something positive?