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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people，however，think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Various
controversy
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controversies
hase emerged
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have emerged
has emerged
 as to whether the most crucial target of
country
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the country
 is economic
progress
. While some people argue that other kinds of
progress
 are as important as economic improvement. In
this
 essay, I will debate both sides of viewpoints and concluded
by
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with
 my own point of view. Advocates of economic
progress
 as
most pivotal goal
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a most pivotal goal
the most pivotal goal
 believe that it is a cornerstone of
flourish
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flourishing
 country. Obtaining wealth is the goal which most of people are seeking for
thier
of them or themselves
their
 whole life, so they endeavour to work in order to reach their goal. With better economic condition, people have more
chace
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
chance
choose
 to have
higher standard
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a higher standard
 of living and could
also
 enjoy high quality material lives.
In addition
, people can invest their money in various kinds of markets,
such
 circumstance can boost economic growth. As the rising of individual wealth, national economy is growing simultaneously. On the other hands, others argue that there are still many crucial goals for county to achieve. One of the most noticeable targets is the level of education.
Government
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The government
 should strive for
rising
increasing in quantity or value
raising
 the level of education to enrich the younger generation's knowledge.
For instance
, giving scholarship for students to encourage them study higher degree or develop vocational skills.
Although
this
 goal could not witness the consequence in the short term, it can foster more competitive generations in the future. From my perspective, both sides of views are not mutually exclusive, economic
progress
 can make people have
better standard
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a better standard
 of living and setting an educational goal could cultivate more competitive generations. To sum up,
government
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the government
 could set different kinds of
goal but
Accept comma addition
goal, but
 the most vital purpose is fostering people's welfare.

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