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Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

From the beginning of the modern age, people started to rely more on
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consumer
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goods
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. With the passage of time,
this
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 need grows rapidly.
As a result
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, it became the most important part of
people’s
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lives
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. Generally speaking, using manufacturers'
goods
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 is less
time consuming
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. But there are many side effects which need to be considered
,
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 first.
Consumer
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goods
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 are the main part of
people’s
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lives
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 and cannot be omitted. But in order to decide whether to bring any specific product into our
life
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, one should weigh the disadvantages
over
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 the advantages. Like any other issue, using
consumer
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goods
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have
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 its pros and cons. The best advantage is that
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 they are ready to use and almost available everywhere. So the purchaser must spend little precious time providing them. In my opinion, there are more merits to
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 durable
goods
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 in comparison to non-durable ones. Durable final products
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 as cars, home furniture and clothing can
last
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 a lifetime and will ease
the
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people’s
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lives
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. They have low to zero harm on humans’ personal well-being.
On the contrary
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, nondurable
goods
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which
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, which
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 mainly consist of
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food
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foods
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foods,
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 can have a lot of side effects on
people’s
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 health.
For instance
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, these foods
are tending
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 to be more inorganic
and
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, and
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 they mostly contain additives to
widen
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prolong
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 their
life
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shelf life
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span
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.
Therefore
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, they can put
people’s
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 health in danger. As it is always said, “Nothing is more valuable than
people’s
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 health.”
To sum up
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 manufacturers’
goods
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 are essential in
people’s
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lives
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. But one must not completely depend on them. Generally speaking, people must buy products
which their
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 merits outweigh the demerits and will cause no harm to their
lives
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.
This
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 is a personal decision which one has to
do
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make
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 sensibly
according to
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 their lifestyle.

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structure
Make a clear plan in your intro. State your view and the points you will use.
grammar
Fix grammar. Check subject verb agreement and tense.
lexical
Use simple words. Short sentences are best.
task response
Give a real example for each point and explain it.
coherence
Make one idea per paragraph and use linking words to join ideas.
content
The essay shows a plan to discuss both sides.
stance
The writer gives a view that durable goods can be better.
examples
Examples like cars and furniture are used.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mass production
  • consumerism
  • economic growth
  • environmental degradation
  • natural resources
  • overconsumption
  • waste management
  • landfill
  • social inequality
  • materialism
  • financial strain
  • mental well-being
  • quality of life
  • job creation
  • productivity
  • pollution
  • deforestation
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