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Some people think that shops should sell food products from the local areas rather than products from other countries.Do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays
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it is generally thought that stores should retail food products sourced from the rural areas
instead
 of products from foreign countries and I agree.
To begin
 with
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developing home based business has been known to positively impact on the economic growth of
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
 countries.
As a result
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the citizens will not spend a lot of money that would have been expended on the rising cost of purchasing farm produce from other countries.
In addition
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these produce will be available and at affordable prices due to the fact that they are home grown.To illustrate
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Ebonyi state
are
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is
 popular for rice cultivation
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hence
 most caterers and homes buy these products from them because they are not exorbitant and very easy to find. Another point to consider is that it will attract foreign investors because of cheap as well as the fact that these farmers will be excited that their produce will make it to the international market.
Consequently
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more countries will express interest for investment opportunities and partnerships.
This
 will improve the employment sector by creating new jobs for the citizens of the country.
As a
result there
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result, there
 will be a drastic reduction in crime rates as most citizens will be gainfully employed. In conclusion
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I agree that buying farm produce
form
a giver or sender
from
 rural parts of the country
instead
 of produce from other countries will ensure availability of
mployment
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
 opportunities as well as a great impact on the economy of the nation.

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