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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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Being a vegetarian or not is an issue which is debatable. Some people prefer to eat only plant based
food
 to animal based, and consider it as a
benifit
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
 to not only their health but
also
 for the whole world.
This
 essay will discuss about, why people should or should not eat meat and conclude why to prefer the latter. Vegetarian
food
 items are a good
source
 of almost every nutrition needed, except for proteins. These play a very important role in muscle building. As there is a scarcity in proteins, if only plant based is eaten, the gap should be filled with high protein
food
.
This
 is the place where meat or fish, which have
protein content
Suggestion
a protein content
 comes into play.
For example
, if a person is trying to build his body, he
tend
Suggestion
tends
 to eat chicken
breast which
Accept comma addition
breast, which
 is a
source
for
Suggestion
of
 high quality protein.
Also
, if we take
this
 argument to a global level, it is good to be in a
food
 chain, which starts from plants and ends with higher beings. It
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 the nature only if the consumption is outrageous;
that is
, if we totally depend on fish as our
food
source
 their number will be reduced drastically, which will break the
food
 chain and causes adverse affects. To control
this
, the consumption should be diverse and wholesome. To conclude,
food
 is the main
source
 of energy for us, which should not be restricted to only some items and has to be diverse and complete. So, eating only plant based
food
 is not a good idea not only on an individual level but
also
 on a global level.

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