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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them, so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Should
education
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 be free or discriminated? University tuition fees are not affordable by all students. A group of people
believe
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believes
 that it should be free for everybody. I personally agree that university
education
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 should become free for every individual person in the
society
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. A viable reason for abolishing university fees is to enable students from poor families to be trained at universities.
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,
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 can reduce the amount of discrimination among the citizens, and
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 will lead to a prosperous
society
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. Another important point is that, many students have to work to cover their studying cost.
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, in case of free
education
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, students can only concentrate on their studies and courses.
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 will guarantee better results in their studies and achieving higher scores.
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 but not least, free higher
education
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 can benefit the
society
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 by opening up the opportunity of higher
education
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 to a vast majority of the population.
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 means that more educated and trained people will live in
country
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a country
the country
. These graduates can eventually return the spent amount of budgets that was attributed to the free
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 in universities. It would
be
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be, therefore
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, economically efficient for a country. In conclusion, free higher
education
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 is a crucial need for any
society
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 to nourish an equality culture and
sense
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a sense
 of cooperation, have real educated people, and develop the country both educationally and financially.
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