Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we don't really need. Others say that advertisements tells us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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assert or affirm strongly; state to be true or existing

claimed

that

advertisingment

are

fourcing

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forced

forcing

forking

fusing

purchase

new

product but

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product, but

they

didn't really required

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didn't really require

haven't really required

, same time others believe that endorsement are

inform

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informing

us to the

iteam

a distinct part that can be specified separately in a group of things that could be enumerated on a list

item

team

that will

impove

to make better

improve

the life style. I will agree with how broadcast

things forcesing

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things, fixing

things fixing

to buy the device.

Firstly

, as a

globalization many

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globalization, many

commerical

connected with or engaged in or sponsored by or used in commerce or commercial enterprises

commercial

comical

things are displayed in everywhere like internet

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TV and Newspapers

hence

who ever

whatever person

whoever

is following these things they are automatically attracted

with

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them same time the product owners are given many offers like buy

one

and get another free

therefore

the common citizens are planning to

purchase

the item because they getting another

one

is free.

Moreover

, for marketing

this

plural of "this"

these

goods they will use for famous persons like cinema star or

sports man

someone who engages in sports

sportsman

then

easily reach to younger

auidence

a gathering of spectators or listeners at a (usually public) performance

audiences

due to they will invest more amount

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this

items

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item

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once it reaches to them,

therefore

public thought that

celebraties

a widely known person

celebrities

also

using

this products

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this product

these products

and planning to

purchase

them.

For Example

in India before 2000 year

their

in or at that place

there

is no beauty products

market but

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market, but

one

commerical

connected with or engaged in or sponsored by or used in commerce or commercial enterprises

commercial

ads are

started

Suggestion

starting

all the beauty

products

Suggestion

product

sales are

increased

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increasing

due to most of the items are published by top hero and heroines and now

india

a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947

India

cosmotic

serving an esthetic rather than a useful purpose

cosmetic

arket

the world of commercial activity where goods and services are bought and sold

market

sale is 10,000

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. On the

otherhand

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other hand

, many

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Young stars

are believe

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believe

that these promotions

are impove

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are improving

are improve

have improved

their

lifes

a characteristic state or mode of living

lives

life

like showing in the

advertesment

a public promotion of some product or service

due the products and quality but they

coudn't

could not

couldn't

relize

be fully aware or cognizant of

realize

realise

release

that is

completely fake. In conclusion,

refers to the speaker or writer

strongly believe that

advertisments

a public promotion of some product or service

Fully explain your ideas

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
47Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

296 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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encourage
persuade
manipulative
unnecessary
excessive
artificial needs
desires
consumers
oversaturation
impulse buying
financial problems
inform
educate
features
benefits
innovations
raise awareness
social issues
positive behavior
enrich
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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we don't really need. Others say that advertisements tells us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Fully explain your ideas

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