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Some people think that work is the most important thing of people’s life. Without the success of career, life become meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words

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Occupation is a constant or most engagement of a person. It prospect largely define a
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's
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 worth. Success in a career is not limited to monetary rewards alone, but includes all other benefits
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 as self actualization and increase in status within the occupation. I agree with the opinion that a career is important to and
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 determines a
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's
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.
This
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 essay discusses some reasons why
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 is important to
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's definition of
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. A job defines a person because it involves the major activities during existence. These activities can be done with joy or sadness depending on what motivates the individual. When successful, the job makes meaning and
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 sees a reason to live and continue it, not minding the stress involved in achieving the task(s).
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, an architect whom the society acknowledges his amazing designs has a succeeded career. Living is meaningful to him because his works satisfy his customers. The impact of a person's activity defines what existence means to them and
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 to the people around them. Are the results positive or negative? An occupation making positive influence boost moral of existence, even if the reward is not big. A teacher's words of advice to his students will go a long way in the students' lives. If adopted by the students, the teacher has succeeded in the job and sees a relevant reason for living. Money is believed to solve most problems. An occupation that provides enough funds to cater for need, gives comfort and defines success. The level of comfort with people determines what living means to them. Lack of basic needs despite hard
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 is discouraging and can make a
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 assume the
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 is meaningless. In conclusion,
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 success rate can be used to define what
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 implies. A
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 that encourage to do more, will most likely translate to a success which in turn implies a
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 worth living.
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