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People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.

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Experimentations of the
youth
 with legal and illegal substances are now increasing in many modern counties that sociologists blame the parents and other citizens about
this
 matter. Though, the roots of
this
 problem are mainly family issues and peer pressure, there some ways in which the problem of
drug
addiction
 among the
youth
 can be solved. There are two main reasons as to why the
youth
 is facing
drug
addiction
.
Firstly
, many young people are now trying different substances due to problems in the family. Issues,
such
 as parents’ separation, can be a cause of lack in parental supervision, wherein the youngster may feel unloved and resort to using drugs.
Secondly
, many of the
youth
 today are addicted to drugs because of their circle of friends. The majority of
drug
 addicted teenagers today admit that they get pressured to use drugs as their peers are using it as well and,
therefore
, fulfil their lack of sense of belongingness to a group.
Nevertheless
, there are some solutions to help combat
drug
addiction
 of the
youth
. One is that governments can offer programs that can increase the knowledge of parents about substance abuse.
This
 can help increase the interest of the parents on how to deal and prevent
drug
 abuse among their teens; helping them to supervise their youngsters as well. Another step to take
in
Suggestion
on
this
 battle of
drug
 abuse among the
youth
 is the counselling help for separating families. Parents who are divorcing should involve their children, especially their teenagers, in finding psychological support.
This
 can assist them in finding ways to express their grief and sadness towards their broken family, rather than abusing drugs. In conclusion, despite the causes that paved way for
youth
drug
addiction
, there are strategies that governments and families can apply to help mitigate
this
 problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glorification
  • peer pressure
  • coping mechanism
  • cognitive development
  • risky behaviors
  • trafficking
  • realistically address
  • parental involvement
  • mental health services
  • escapism
  • societal impact
  • substance abuse
  • preventative measures
  • healthcare burden
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