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Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent do you agree?

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Cities are characterized with lots of cars use probably due to increased industrialization in the environment. Some governments are looking into reducing the quantity of vehicles on the major city roads by using some measures
such
 as restricting certain vehicle type in some areas.
This
 essay agrees to the measure which bans the use of private cars from the city centres. Increased cars on urban roads have contributed greatly to road
traffic
. People get late to work in the morning and
likewise
 get home late. In Lagos
for instance
, routes to industrialized areas are usually
traffic
 intensified.
This
traffic
 in turn has increased pollution,
such
 as noise and air pollution. Vehicles horn indiscriminately because drivers are in a haste. Several cars on the highway increase the quantity of carbon monoxide released into the environment. After getting to work, despite the
traffic
, people are faced with the problem of parking their motors. Some park by the roadside or walkway.
This
further
 obstructs the flow of
traffic
 for road users and sidewalks. Road
traffic
 and parking are
also
 known to encourage robbery in some cities like Lagos. Hoodlums break car windows and take peoples' belongings. Can governments' plan to ban private vehicles from city centres make a major difference?Yes, it can, thereby making highways less busy and walk areas free. Road flows properly while pollution level is reduced. Theft rates
falls
Suggestion
fall
 since vehicles will move at a steady speed. Individuals have the options of public or company buses to convey them to
such
 areas. Ferry use or cycling could be better options too if applicable. In conclusion, the implementation of
this
 policy will go a long way in
decongesting
 the major urban roads. Economic activities
,
Accept space
,
 citizens' and environmental health will feel
this
 positive impact.
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