Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Music

has been one of the fundamental entertainment since ages. A group of people believes that

music

can help unite people of various ages and cultures because of its influence among different age groups. In my opinion, I strongly believe that

music

is the only way to overcome barriers between people and will like to discuss my views.

Firstly

, the influence

music

has over different cultures and its popularity and affinity among several age groups made it one of the primary keys in bringing people together.

Moreover

, the songs played in movies and television shows today is similar across many languages and regions across the world, helping ages of all groups to overcome the barrier of starting a conversation.

For instance

, a

music

event conducted by "Tomorrow Land" in Sweden has attracted thousands of people with various backgrounds from different parts of the world.

Secondly

, unlike sports or any other events where fans of different teams can get into fights due to the outcome of the game.

On the other hand

, musical events do not have

such

kind of scenario and people are well aware of the taste of

music

they are going to listen to. To illustrate, Many "Electronic Dance

Music

" events conduct around the world is played by several "Disk Jockeys" but the genres played in the event remains same. In conclusion, no matter what the

music

is played it has many positive points in overcoming the barrier of getting people of several cultures and ages closer together.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

250 words

6.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

universal language
evoke
connect
diverse audiences
cultural exchange
generational gaps
shared experiences
unifying force

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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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