You live in a room in college which shared with another student.However,there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accomodation officer at thee college In this letter, Describe your situation Explain your problems and why it’s difficult to work Say what kind of accomodation you would prefer.

Dear Sir or Ma, I am writing

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letter to inform you about the situation am presently facing in my current

accomodation

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accommodation

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, the

accomodation

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accommodation

alright

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me,

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roommate

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is really making me

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find it difficult to attend to my studies.I hope you will consider my situation? Let me explain my situation.My

roommate

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is a very social person and keeps a lot of friends.Most time his friends are in the room, making noise and

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playing incessantly loud music and these had made it impossible for me to sleep.

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, my

roommate

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level of hygiene is terrible and

these

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leaves

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me to

having

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less time for my studies because I spend more time cleaning up his mess. Would you be kind enough to transfer me or my roomie to another room?

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don’t have a preference for a particular type of accommodation but would like to live with someone

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more quiet and considerate and

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have a better level of hygiene than my present

roommate

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. Thanks for your consideration.

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Your

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faithfully Tumi

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Sep 6, 2019

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

177 words

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